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Rpground
Not a Llama - Happy April Fools Day!

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@FancyCat2008  
NSFW Link:  
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/56843/1/flutterbox/cootershy
 
 
@Artie downer  
It’s been done now, I actually held on a little longer in hopes of improvement. It showed, but then it got worse…sorry.
 
Also, sorry if I sounded ranty and off the wall. Was 4AM, I had a couple of drinks and not in the best of moods…but there is something to gather from my rant, if you want your viewers to be invested in your characters you have to make them believable and consistent…character growth is fine if it’s not done in less then a minute of reading. Blowing up everyone/thing but the one who wronged you, then helping them makes absolutely no sense when the reason behind the outburst was that person/thing.
 
In the end though, I was wrong for the outburst and apologize.
 
And in reference to the other comment I made on the other upload, it was before this one I made…would help if I actually looked in order before commenting as well.
Artie downer

@Rpground  
hey, here’s an idea. How about instead of needlessly complaining about something you obviously don’t like, why don’t you just block the LMR tag? Because your constant negativity is simply not needed.
Rpground
Not a Llama - Happy April Fools Day!

Chaotic Neutral
@Rpground  
I’ve never had a story break me so much…I mean…sorry…I’m done.
 
I’m outright done, I am no longer invested enough to continue anymore. I just quit on this artist…sorry, but as I said…one can only swallow so much before they can’t take it anymore…
Rpground
Not a Llama - Happy April Fools Day!

Chaotic Neutral
What royal bullshit is this…
 
No…that makes NO FUCKING SENSE! Why the FUCK would you do that?! You JUST SAID YOU WERE GOING TI FINISH THIS, AND THEN THIS HAPPENS!?
 
What the flying fuck!? RARITY KILLED YOUR SISTER, YET YOU KILL TWILIGHT AND OPAL! Yet you don’t kill the one, FUCKING RESPONSIBLE FOR HER DEATH!?
 
Oh sure, that makes perfect sense! The next time a friend murders one of my family, I’ll just kill my friend’s dog and then my other friend even though they weren’t the one that killed her…and now I’m going to protect you…DO YOU SEE THE PROBLEM WITH THIS!?
 
This is, hands down, THE worst writing I have EVER seen…and I’ve read Twilight, Dragon You Over, and a fanfiction where Fluttershy’s cunt starts talking and trying to get laid. Hell, I’ve read fanfiction stories of the Twilight Saga that crossed over with Harry Potter and it STILL was more coherent then this…
 
The characters were defined, personalities were presented and what their motives were given…and that was that, they didn’t decide randomly to change their motive for no logical reason. Even the reason was “He saw some shit just then.” It’s more fucking believable then this.
 
I can accept bullshit ok, I’ve seen a hell of a lot…but this…it’s indescribable at this point…when the guy behind Sonichu is making more coherent stories and characters…you need to step back a bit and think for a second “Is this good story telling?” Cause…just wow…your audience can only swallow so much…
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DarkMech is Best Mech
“Ah’m sure y’all don’t understand now,”
 
Yeah, I’ll give you that one, AJ. I don’t mind that you started murdering the other freaks, but you’re going to have to explain why you stopped with Rares.
Background Pony #5A24
Bah. It’s not like Twilight’s actually dead. Even if that’s really Twilight laying in a pile of guts on a tree over there, she wouldn’t be the first character in this world to show up chipper and baking the next morning.
FancyCat2008
The End wasn't The End - Found a new home after the great exodus of 2012

@FancyCat2008  
I don’t hate it. Hell, I like LMJ. I’ve bought art from him at conventions. I just think his LMR blog’s gone way off the rails. Also someone needs to teach him about “Show, Don’t Tell.”
FancyCat2008
The End wasn't The End - Found a new home after the great exodus of 2012

I have no idea what the fuck is even going on in this story anymore.
 
Anyone else remember when this was just a kinky ask-blog about a Rarity that liked to masturbate with knives? Anyone? ’cause I would love it if we could go back to that.
Background Pony #7B48
hooray to poor writing and plot contrivance! plot contrivance, when you lack the ability to think out a plot line and want to force a situation to occur.
Background Pony #7B48
….. well this shifted from contrived to garbage very quickly.
 
honesty is a fucking virtue.
 
also she was just talking about ending this whole fiasco ten seconds ago. now she saying, oh lets make sure it continues. are you freaking kidding me? how contrvied can you get?