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This is my first original character.  
King Harmodius is the elder qilin king who protects the Qilin Kingdom.
 
Harmodius was born as the king of the Qilin Kingdom. One day, Harmodius decided to go free flying, mostly to let himself stretch his wings. However, while he was away, Drakhetor, Harmodius’s evil twin brother, sat on the throne, making him king of Qilin Kingdom. As Drakhetor gained the power of the throne, he terrorized the kingdom, concealing it in darkness. Harmodius blamed himself for what happened and sought out for the ponies for help.

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Prof.NightJack
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@Grieffon  
I’m not being harsh, if I was I would say it was crap from the look alone, it’s the story’s huge plot hole that makes it close to crap, I’m being fair here by saying it the backstoy that makes it bad.
Prof.NightJack
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@Yorec  
It’s the story that make it or brakes it for me, I could over look the OC’s look if the story is good but that story here has gaping plot holes that to me drag the design down even more, making it crap.
Yorec
The End wasn't The End - Found a new home after the great exodus of 2012

Also may I ask, where did the tag “qilin” come from? Did someone make that up or is it from some story or show that I am not aware of?
Yorec
The End wasn't The End - Found a new home after the great exodus of 2012

Because you know, merely sitting on a throne will give you control of a kingdom.
 
I mean is the throne magical? Does it suddenly give you incredible wisdom and power by sitting on it? Can it be used by anyone? Why would you let such a powerful item just be out in the open for anyone to sit on?
 
And how long exactly was Harmodius gone for? Going to stretch your wings shouldn’t give his brother ample time to bring his kingdom under his heel.
 
When you write a story you have to really make sure there aren’t such glaring plot holes like that.
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As Chief said, unless you are experienced and have really good skill, you should stay away from alicorn OCs, because people really hate them unless they are very well-designed, for example:
 
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Prof.NightJack
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Stupid, the story has a HUGH hole in it, if just siting on the throne make someone the kind then it makes no sense to even leave it for anything.