Fanfic Writing General

@Background Pony #DEA3
VSE about Texting While Driving.

setting live action sitcom general setting prolly in the early uhh.. 00s.

Starts with main character and his friends in a car, his Cool Kid Best Fiend (like Shawn to Cory) is driving.
they are pulled over by a cop who tickets the friend for texting, and the friend is further punished by his parents when the kids get back home. Part of said additional punishment is his parents take his phone, which he feels is pure evil and steals it back. He then starts texting the group and some of his other friends about it. When the texts become more and more ranting most of the group feel uneasy and drop out of the ‘chat’. It ends with the main charater still there but texting only a little and the Friend mosty texting another friend of his… who is revealed to be behind the wheel himself. Ends with the two rapidly texting back and forth.. until the crash and the fade to white.

fade back in to the next day. The friends friend in the car survided the wreck. The girl in the passenger seat did not, nor did some of the family of 5 whom he T boned. Semi montage of the arrest and parts of the trail and lawsuits. The BF who was texting the driver is also hit with charges and sued.

What do you think of this idea?

I want to create a land beyond Equestria that was founded by ponies and one other creature race, which is different in terms of technology and magic.

As time progresses, by the 21st century, the magic in this land becomes unique and is unknown even to the most powerful unicorns in Equestria. This magic cannot be taken away, regardless of whether a unicorn can still use its normal magic, and it can also be accessed by Earth and pegasus ponies.

Most importantly, this magic is primarily used to power technology that appears even more advanced than what
we have in the 21st century.

For example, hoverbikes or carriages can hover slightly above the ground, but they are only used during weather conditions like rain or snow. They are still pony-driven, as they always have been.

I just want to express it because I don’t want to fall into the “bad idea” too much tech not enough magic idea, also I had this way before mlp gen 5 but I still want to add this to my AU one day

@Mr100dragon100
What other species? Dragons? Yaks? Humans? Zebras or Kirin? Though I consider the latter two (as well as abadas and kelpies) pony-adjacent.

I want to be more original with my fanfiction. One of my ideas features a creature inspired by the Creature from the Black Lagoon. I’m also considering incorporating mummies, werewolves, vampires, and possibly spirits.

Additionally, I’ve been thinking about including Gen 1 races as spirits from another realm. I might also add dragons that haven’t been mentioned in the show, such as those that have wings and feathers but no legs or arms.

I considered adding European bison, but I want to avoid too much tension due to the history of vampires and others.

Idk this is something I should wait till I actully get to the point where the land will be founded.

I cannot include anything already mentioned in the show or comics, as it might break continuity. Even though I disregard the comics, I do not include them for the same reason.

It is the 23rd century. The Babylon Project was our last, best hope for peace. A self-contained world, located in neutral territory. A dream given form. A shining beacon of a united galaxy, all alone in the night. It failed, yet it succeeded beyond expectation. The Babylon Project, and the galaxy, faced many threats over the course of the project. The Minbari, the Psi Corps, the Shadows, the entities from Thirdspace. But now, a new threat emerges, greater than all others. An unknown equine race which seeks to convert the races of the Interstellar Alliance into its own would begin a massive extermination campaign across the galaxy. Not only is Babylon our last, best hope for peace, it is our last, best hope… for survival. This is the story of the greatest of the Babylon stations. The year is 2299. The name of the place is Babylon Prime.

Misty walks into Opaline’s chambers. Lights are flickering erratically, and what looks like singing can be heard alongside other noises. She approaches the purple alicorn.

Misty: You wanted to see me?
Opaline: Yes. Look what Sunny did.

Misty notices the computer screen Opaline’s facing. There are a pair of… things zooming around the screen, one is a sickly green, the other is off-white with some blue on it.

Opaline: A couple of virus ponies. She shoved them into my network, and now they’re snooping around, digging through my apps, my personal files… everything. 20 minutes ago, they figured out the passwords to my bank accounts, and then went on a spending spree. I now have two trucks worth of Mane Melodies-branded supplies, salon furniture, beauty equipment, and other stuff on my way, since they made me one of Pipp’s franchisees, and i’m now a 30% shareholder on an apple farm somewhere.

As Opaline speaks, the sounds start making Misty’s head hurt.

Misty: That sound… that hideous sound… it’s so… bad…
Opaline: It’s changeling opera. Apparently, Sunny and her friends have an especially perverse sense of humor. I have to find a way to stop this!
Misty: You could always… apologize.
Opaline: Apologize? Never! I’ve sworn to die before i apologize to Sunny!

Then a couple of sparks fly out, and the music stops, but only for one of the viruses to speak:

Elkie: Hey, Opal! Guess who now owns a 20% share of Parasprites Incorporated. That’s right, it’s you!

Some more sparks fly out, then all the lights and screens turn off, leaving Misty and Opaline in the dark.

Opaline: On second thought, maybe i should rescind that swear.

Does anyone else ever get really nervous whenever they see one of their stories has gotten a review. I do. I mean, the reviews I’ve been getting for my current story have been mostly positive, but I’m always on edge because I have gotten some pretty scathing commentary in the past.

After the feedback I got from the most recent chapter of my story, I might do something I haven’t done in quite a while: a rewrite. I have to admit, I was writing mainly to just “get it done,” which is never a good mentality to have for writing. I actually might do something I’ve never done before and have a beta reader go through the chapter and make recommendations on what I should fix. Would anyone here have any suggestions on where I could find some people willing to do that?