In terms of art you have significantly improved. While your art style is still largely the same it feels a lot more consistent. Before my main issue wasn’t the semi-anthro way you drew ponies but that it wasn’t consistent. With them being very equine in some panels but very anthropomorphic in others. Right now it feels consistent.
Well …
In this Story Fluttershy want a (at least what she had in her mind, maybe that was she thought wanted) a non sexual romantic relation. This relation got it high point in the marriage and no when she had this fulfillment of her fairy tale she give’s in becource of duty.
If She dossent hafe a erotic intend (Even if she did not consciosly know it) it may be … akward… i hope she realise that it is about sex, its still Anon the Best and Greatest Pony Fu**er around all of Cloppquestria….
She is fooling nobody, they both wound up tight as coils
I bet 3 cookies and a cupcake the nervousness will disappear mid round and instinct will take over just like it got Purple Smart.
It’s a bit strange she refers to him as a “human”. I would think she would either call him something like “my love” or call him a “stallion” because that would be what she sees him as. She is a mare and they desire a stallion. He would be her stallion, that he isn’t a real stallion would not matter to Fluttershy.
That she refers to him by species kind of makes it feel like that’s what she sees him as first.
I think “stallion” fits best because right now she is acting like a mare first and foremost.
Flutters is old-fashioned, he must have ironclad will power for him to have such a gorgeous mare and resist being able to hit that, I hope she’s got a strong back. When she gets all that man and release all that that’s been built up, all the time they’ve been dating just wanting and wanting and wanting! WHOOO! Might make her head blow off. Pop goes the weasel!