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However I really do like this story.


 
You did great with the atmosphere. Describing the breeding habits of bee changelings, or a dwelling without many hallways. And the land of Everbrook is so pretty with even a door with flowers.


 
And I definitely love a bit of mystery, intrigue and madness.


 
I think it's an ok prologue though it can definitely be improved.


 
I wish you would have named the Bee Changelings' town though. But I truly am curious to see what goes on next.


 
Poor Everbrook though! I wonder what our heroes will have to do to save her. I am curious. That's all for my somewhat unorganized review. But I definitely like it.

However I really do like this story.

You did great with the atmosphere. Describing the breeding habits of bee changelings, or a dwelling without many hallways. And the land of Everbrook is so pretty with even a door with flowers.

And I definitely love a bit of mystery, intrigue and madness.

I think it's an ok prologue though it can definitely improved.

I wish you would have named the Bee Changelings' town though. But I truly am curious to see what go on next.

Poor Everbrook though! I wonder what our heroes will have to do to save her. I am curious. That's all for my somewhat unorganized review. But I definitely like it.