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Thought I’d have a go at re-drawing one of my old pictures. And my highest scoring one on here seemed like a good idea at the time. Comparing this to the original, I’m not sure whether I’m really improving at all to be honest.  
>>860982

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40kponyguy
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AimingToPlease,OftenMiss
@jpony
 
Story here
 
First chapter (and the second as it happens) are really just explaining what’s going on and setting the scene, plus explaining a few things to those that wouldn’t understand the background of 40k. It picks up pace in chapter 3-4.  
Chapter 5 is dedicated to the main antagonist, (which in this was the spirit that turned Luna in to Nightmare Moon), and subsequently takes control of a titan (big walking mech (robot with a crew) from the game. Twilight brings this down whilst saving a small group of human soldiers, so obviously this daemon has it in for the main 6 after this. To get it’s revenge, it takes over a certain season 2 finale antagonist.  
Chapter 6 is pretty slow, and is more about the human soldiers and the 8 ponies in the story socializing. I may even skip this chapter when drawing the comic version. There’s a couple of jokes in there, (a certain grey musical mare getting called a donkey being an obvious one), but nothing that would ruin the whole story if I skipped it. It basically explains that the soldiers agree to help the ponies get the item they’ve been sent to get.
 
Chapter 7 is (in my opinion) the best one so far, and sees Rarity knock out a full squad of enemy soldiers (badly trained and poorly equipped, but still), and a big transport aircraft by dropping a statue on it. It also has a duel between Twilight and one of the most powerful sorcerers in the game of 40k. This seems to get the most views of all the chapters on Fimfiction.
 
Chapter 8 is ongoing over on Fimfiction, but is likely to see 3 planned casualties from the human soldiers. I have no intention of any lasting harm coming to the canon characters. If this story goes as I plan to do it, it would fit in to the series.
 
 
As for the artwork, I have actually matched up the armies to the characters as best I can.  
Pinkie using Orks, which are loud and anarchic. >>719562 (merged)  
Sunset Shimmer using Chaos Daemons (as she turned in to a daemon in the first Equestria Girls film) >>720896 (merged)  
Chrysalis using Tyranids (an army of bugs, nuff said) >>730163 (merged)  
Flutterbat using Blood Angels (which are cursed with a flaw which basically makes the vampires) >>734302 (merged)  
Rainbow Dash using Dark Angels Ravenwing (All bikes and fliers, meaning they’re fast) >>737390 (merged)  
And Gilda using Space Wolves (A close rival to the Dark Angels) >>744992 (merged)
 
Okay, I understand what you’re getting at with the comic. Too many scenes, few glitches (which is a problem when doing them this way as I can’t correct them easily- I have actually tweaked a few recent pictures using MS paint, mainly to clean up lines or correct something that was bugging me. For example, the Applebloom pic here >>909072. I straightened her bow up, and erased a bad line on her muzzle, and another on her hoof next to the ‘E’).  
The inside of the train, I was using this for reference >>238114  
I’ll probably keep that format unless there’s something interesting going on which would benefit from a bigger image (such as Twilight facing that Warhound titan).
jpony

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@40kponyguy  
The comic sounds promising. I like the design on the title letters. Sometimes, the foreground of the picture seems to get mixed up with the background, notably Twilight’s mouth in panel 8. See how there’s closure around the head but it’s colored the same as the grass? Also, there are quite a few panels in the comic. Maybe you could try having fewer panels but with more going on in each panel. Not that it’s necessarily bad the way it’s now - it just seems paced a bit slow to me.
 
Well, I’m certainly aware of Tenchi Muyo now, but I didn’t know about it when I was a kid and haven’t watched more than an episode of two, though I do like the characters and their designs.
 
It’s true that I don’t know much about 40k. It looks interesting. That’s clever how you integrated an element from the game with the design and personality of Rarity.
 
You seem to know quite a bit about design. I’ve also done a little bit of critiquing on 4chan, though I don’t go there much now. In addition, I try to draw a bit myself. None of it is posted here. I drew a few simple face portraits of the mane 6 (humanized - I’ve had some problems drawing ponies). This was back before Equestria Girls. Those images were lost in the Great Hard Drive Failure of 2013. I sometimes try to draw ponies or EQG (usually with questionable subject matter which you can probably guess). I usually draw digitally now. Rarely, I’ll draw on paper and scan the image to the computer, but I almost never color traditionally anymore.
 
I’ve seen some of your work on the site and it’s pretty cute. Glad to see you’re a fan of Sonata, too.
 
(sorry guy, I meant to reply earlier but ran into issues)
40kponyguy
Shimmering Smile - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of Equestria Girls!
Crystal Roseluck - Had their OC in the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
Flower Trio - Helped others get their OC into the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
King Sombra - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of The Crystal Empire!
A Lovely Nightmare Night - Celebrated the 12th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Princess of Love - Extra special version for those who participated in the Canterlot Wedding 10th anniversary event by contributing art.
Tree of Harmony - Drew someone's OC for the 2022 Community Collab
Elements of Harmony - Had an OC in the 2022 Community Collab
Kinship Through Differences - Celebrated the 11th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Verified Pegasus - Show us your gorgeous wings!

AimingToPlease,OftenMiss
@jpony  
For what it’s worth, here’s a link to one of my earlier pictures.  
>>718259 (merged)  
Rarity using Eldar in a game of 40k. (You may not know anything about the game, but the Eldar models are absolutely covered in gems, so they seemed fitting).
 
Another of my earliest pictures for here was this of the OC ‘Safe Haven’  
>>598296 (merged)  
I used to frequent 4chan before I came here, and I was a regular on the threads for that character. Even advised the guy that created her on improving his artwork when he did this one >>560169. Told him about fading the eye colour from dark-to-light as you work down the eye. It gives the eye more depth, and just looks better.  
I even used that same picture on the back of the transport model in my pony themed army  
>>663557.
40kponyguy
Shimmering Smile - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of Equestria Girls!
Crystal Roseluck - Had their OC in the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
Flower Trio - Helped others get their OC into the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
King Sombra - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of The Crystal Empire!
A Lovely Nightmare Night - Celebrated the 12th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Princess of Love - Extra special version for those who participated in the Canterlot Wedding 10th anniversary event by contributing art.
Tree of Harmony - Drew someone's OC for the 2022 Community Collab
Elements of Harmony - Had an OC in the 2022 Community Collab
Kinship Through Differences - Celebrated the 11th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Verified Pegasus - Show us your gorgeous wings!

AimingToPlease,OftenMiss
@jpony  
I guess I’m just trying to redeem myself after the first page of my crossover comic got such a cold reception.  
>>907169
 
Must admit, some of the scenes there didn’t come out too well. I’ll probably finish chapter 1 at least, then see how it goes.
 
Saw from your ‘about me’ that you like anime.  
May be a bit old for you to remember, but I have done a few Tenchi Muyo crossover pictures after watching the series (Tenchi Universe) with my daughter. Don’t know if you’ve seen those.  
(Admittedly I linked to one of them a couple of comments back here, so you can find them that way).
jpony

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Just be patient, man. How long has it been since the original drawing? Two months? It’s hard to improve so much over such a short period of time. I can definitely see some improvements (more detail in the hair, the ponytail in the back, the eyebrows, everything just looks sharper and cleaner), so just keep at it!
40kponyguy
Shimmering Smile - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of Equestria Girls!
Crystal Roseluck - Had their OC in the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
Flower Trio - Helped others get their OC into the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
King Sombra - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of The Crystal Empire!
A Lovely Nightmare Night - Celebrated the 12th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Princess of Love - Extra special version for those who participated in the Canterlot Wedding 10th anniversary event by contributing art.
Tree of Harmony - Drew someone's OC for the 2022 Community Collab
Elements of Harmony - Had an OC in the 2022 Community Collab
Kinship Through Differences - Celebrated the 11th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Verified Pegasus - Show us your gorgeous wings!

AimingToPlease,OftenMiss
@BarryFromMars  
Not sure if these are good or bad points. Bigger eyes tend to come across as cuter and appeal more to the viewer.  
I did put more light points in the eyes this time, (although the hearts are smaller), as well as highlighting her hair, (something I thought I’d apply to this after doing it in this picture >>892228).  
The hooves are more pointed than in the original, but I think the angle’s still the same, (roughly).  
The more upright the ears are done, the more alert the character seems, so when she’s trying to get attention, this would be an improvement.
Barry Tone
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>The ears are pointed more upward than 45 degrees  
>The eyes are smaller and farther in to the head  
>Mane’s going in front of the sign  
>Paper’s more detailed  
>Hooves are either pointier or at another angle  
>Eyes appear a bit more detailed